The first thing i thought about while watching this is how good this could be with a higher framerate. Also the characters and backgrounds could have some more shades/light effects. Apart from that it's pretty good.
About the sound, be sure to put the highest sound quality when saving the project. Some programs have it at minimum by default.
Thanks. Really appreciate the feedback. I totally agree about the shading, I started shading with the police guy in this, but i am focusing more on it in episode 1.2.
I literally started animating 2 months ago so I've got a lot to learn, lol but I just wondered what u meant by a higher frame rate?
It sure is fun to make fun noises, but you should come up with a better humor.
Djaner is a dick
It's kind of a shame that backstory is no longer a thing, it really did build a good sort of atmosphere before the actual action.
I completely agree, although people giving feedbacks for the first episode thought the story bits are a bit dragging. Also doing the story & dialogue takes a lot longer for the episode to be finished, which apparently most people just wanna skip.
Well, as said below, the face and the anatomy generally could use some work. Also this hair look kinda disturbing, did you just take it from somewhere else? Anyway, about the animation. I like that even the bed and part of hair have a bit of motion, it's always nice to see that this is not just some sort of a dummy. You definitely need to poot more intermediate frames into it, so the whole picture can look smoother. Just about 5 frames for tits and 2 for arms isn't enough, you can do better for sure. Also i'm not sure that this is a suitable sound for a titfuck but i know how hard this is to find something that sounds not weird xD
You should watch some of the good NSFWs here on Newgrounds, it might help.
Anyway, keep doing what you are doing, it is always hard at first, but you will keep getting better and better eventually. Just be sure to try something new with every new try. I'll keep my eye on you :D
Thank you. As for the hair I drew it out and tried to cell shade it. I'm still new to drawing. I never really was great at it haha. I have a lot of improving. For the sound effect I wanted it to sound like a fap sound. Its really hard to find sound effects that can be applied to adult flash...I'll try harder next time.
That cartoon head in the end is unnecessary in my opinion.
Alright, this is not that bad for a first try. Try makin' more frames for a more smooth motion, otherwise it will look jumpy. I like the artstyle, i definitely can imagine something great drawn this way. It is better to make a gif/swf file instead of video format, imo. Sound would be great, even if it sounds weird its better than nothing. Anyhow, keep trying to improve. We will surely get better eventually xD
I would love to convert into gif, but I can't get the quality right, .swf would be nice :D
You totally need frames for the text
Shut Up ;-; xD
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